Thursday, January 28, 2010

forever in pain



upon the throne of thorns ,
descend the gloomy eyes ,
sorrow dipped blood ,
under the cloaked hood.

in the doom of whom ,
tears bathe in blood ,
pain sensed in naught ,
crucified is the heart ,
the soul , ripped apart.

gulped is the guilt with greed ,
dealt is the pride with breed ,
avarice is the acedia in the empty pores ,
sewn is the lechery in the black heart ,
sown is the wrath in the envy of ,
the red and white stitched eye ,
the cracking skin beneath the cloak ,
trembling like a lion ,
for all by curse ,
dwell in one.

the soft screams in vain ,
rendezvous with pain ,
with each taking turns ,
playing their part ,
moulding the fragile heart ,
for the most part.

with the chest heavy ,
the mortal brewing inside ,
the fervid fractious urges ,
nerves shivering like aspen ,
the curse flaring vicious fear ,
with the slit smile on the distort face ,
procreates sin after sin ,
the fiend jinni.

not a reason ,
not a soul ,
not a heart ,
not the intentions ,
not a choice ,
chosen amidst the unsullied ,
to walk the , baneful berm.

but for the little part ,
of the cursed black art ,
the glimpse of hope ,
the spark of smile ,
the will of fire ,
burn within incessantly ,
and wait for the sun to rise by ,
in the utopia of the cursed.



10 comments:

  1. very nicely depicted.... the pain as a person.... it won't be understood by evrerybody.... but after every dusk, there is dawn.....so the moral is never loose hope.... eventhough the pain can be greater than the suffering......

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  2. k.
    its a great poem....
    wel sumtimes....suffering is d best medicine 2 a heart....
    sumtimes...pain is all u need..to fulfil ur heart....
    sumtimes...pain n suffering r d only way u can survive in dis world...
    so keep ritin...n njoyin....
    its a great n bloodied hell goin poem... keep it up...
    n keep dem cumin...

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  4. nice depiction and the imagery of human emotions.....language thodi bhaari hai........ :)

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  5. mighty good poem . except for a few things :

    try not to use repetitive words unless they are in a chorus . for eg : blood , curse etc

    try to keep the language simple.most times things can be best expressed in the most simple words. though this doesn't mean that you compromise on the feel of the poem .

    Cheers !! Keep 'em coming !!
    PS : gave me inspiration to write another poem too . THNX :D :D

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  6. Good yaar :D
    Bhatti what is your inspiration man!!!

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  7. You improve with every coming work...... engaging, enthralling and obviously the pain isn't superficial..... I was right something is amiss with you... I just hope it's gone and given birth to yet another masterpiece

    Keep 'em coming and sure thing I would tell my kids someday about the great poet who was my batchmate..... :):):)

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  8. We have taken birth to endure sorrow, grief, pain and sufferings thats what we do most of the time......highs and lows of life......
    bhatti bhai u have presented all this awsomely....... :)

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  9. When is the next installment going to come?

    Come out of your slumber..

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  10. excerpt frm ode 2d west wind by P B Shelley,
    "i fall upon the thorns of life, i bleed.."
    frm d same poem later..
    "the trumpet of a prophecy! o wind, if winter comes can spring be far behind?"

    it seems 2 really fit in here..:))

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